Thank you! Yes, there were quite a few moments of not much happening in the early part of the episode, but which are easily counter-balanced by the OHMYGODCRAZY last 1/3 or so...
I see that you added some dialogue with Doctor and Donna just before Yuri call with an infected Maggie. Any reason why?
I did indeed! It comes down to the fact that it surprised me a lot that there wasn't the typical exposition of the Doctor giving some explanation about himself, as he usually does, and the fact that no one even blinked when he said "I'm sorry with all of my hearts." I just found it impossible that someone like Adelaide, who likes to be in control and know what's going on, wouldn't push for that sort of explanation. I did think about including it during the moment of the viewer watching as Andy changes, but that would make Mia's reaction at the end wrong, so it had to be done during this scene.
I like how you make references to the Library in this chapter. And to the other episodes in the ones before.
Thanks. Yup, for me, the Library is one of the hugest events that takes place in S4 and I can't see how it wouldn't reververate down even this much later.
I am pretty sure the Doctor is making a reference about the time it was Donna's face on a stick.
Very well picked up! It was indeed.
Poor, poor Roman. I am pretty sure he will be well in the end. (As well as one can be at the end of that episode)
Well, I'm sure, having been converted by the Flood, he won't be feeling any more pain, so he's as well as can be expected...
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I see that you added some dialogue with Doctor and Donna just before Yuri call with an infected Maggie. Any reason why?
Donna shudders. “God, it’s like the Library all over again.”
I like how you make references to the Library in this chapter. And to the other episodes in the ones before.
“Yeah, it’s kind of hard to forget what a face on a stick tells you.”
“You’re telling me,” he agrees quietly, squeezing her hand before turning to Andy, who is still watching them through the window.
I am pretty sure the Doctor is making a reference about the time it was Donna's face on a stick.
She can’t help but wonder if Roman is feeling any of this.
Poor, poor Roman. I am pretty sure he will be well in the end. (As well as one can be at the end of that episode)
So...once again good job! I am still worried about Donna, I hope all my worries are for nothing.
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I see that you added some dialogue with Doctor and Donna just before Yuri call with an infected Maggie. Any reason why?
I did indeed! It comes down to the fact that it surprised me a lot that there wasn't the typical exposition of the Doctor giving some explanation about himself, as he usually does, and the fact that no one even blinked when he said "I'm sorry with all of my hearts." I just found it impossible that someone like Adelaide, who likes to be in control and know what's going on, wouldn't push for that sort of explanation. I did think about including it during the moment of the viewer watching as Andy changes, but that would make Mia's reaction at the end wrong, so it had to be done during this scene.
I like how you make references to the Library in this chapter. And to the other episodes in the ones before.
Thanks. Yup, for me, the Library is one of the hugest events that takes place in S4 and I can't see how it wouldn't reververate down even this much later.
I am pretty sure the Doctor is making a reference about the time it was Donna's face on a stick.
Very well picked up! It was indeed.
Poor, poor Roman. I am pretty sure he will be well in the end. (As well as one can be at the end of that episode)
Well, I'm sure, having been converted by the Flood, he won't be feeling any more pain, so he's as well as can be expected...